Harper

All I can say is wow after reading this. You described the combat so well and I was feeling every emotion while reading it. The cliff hanger at the end has left me wondering what exactly just happened. I am looking forward to seeing what is to come. Great work!

This is a great opening story to set the tone for the rest of the stories to come after! The tension was palpable and evident through the writing. You did a great job showing how the characters felt for their missing captain but also their sense of professionalism and duty to do what it necessary to find out what happened. I enjoyed this opening scene and can't wait to read more! Great job!

Wow, what a great twist to the mission! The way you tied the events of the Shackleton Expanse into this Fleet Action mission was good work. I love the connection and it was well executed. I fear that the ship having to be destroyed is the only outcome, but I am hoping some alternative is offered up in the stories to come. Great work!

This is an absolutely great continuation of the mission. It is well written and Jason's transition is perfectly executed. The relationship dynamics here are one of the best parts of this. I look forward to reading each story and I can't wait to see where this goes next. Great job!

I am loving the connections between the two different versions of the Grus crew here. I think you have done a great job linking the two and drawing in interest from readers. The opening part about Lyambo is intriguing and I am interested to see how that plays into the story as we go. Great work!

I simply love the approach you have taken with this. I enjoyed reading about the difference in histories and how that has impacted both Chad and Charles' life. The fact that they are able to speak with one another is a great feature and I am enjoying it. I look forward to seeing what comes next. Great job!

I absolutely loved this story. Your characters have such great banter back and forth and it makes your stories even more enjoyable! I thought you did a great job detailing the differences here that Harris was noticing along the way. Well done!

I love the contrast here between the lighthearted banter and seriousness of the situation. I like the approach you have taken with the Ensign having disappeared while in a holosuite. It is an interesting story hook, and I am definitely intrigued to read more. Great work!

I am a tad late to this party but what a great story! I absolutely love your writing. This was a great prologue that sets up the story for the Fleet Action. I think the music playing and being distorted is a really nice touch. And I really like your song choices too. Great work!

I have to concur with some of my peers' sentiments. It is definitely hard to tell that you are new to creative writing. You write with vivid descriptions and display your characters in such a way that makes the reader like each and every one of them. This is such an interesting story, and you left it on a cliff hanger! Way to hook us in! I can't wait to read what comes next. Great work!

I am a bit late to the party, but I am glad I showed up! You have done a great job here! Your descriptions of the characters as they are introduced are very well done. It is very easy to picture everything about them. I look forward to reading more of your work and seeing what adventures the crew of the Moorpark find themselves in. Great job!

What a great start to a mission for the new Fleet Action. It is evident that Harris has a challenge ahead of him. I like how you started with the talk of marriage and the joking between Harris and Jason which sets you up nicely for the journey that is about to have to happen in order to bring Harris back. I think this will bring about an emotional attachment to us readers which will keep us hooked throughout. Great job!

I think this is such a great opening story. The power of sharing a meal traverses through the galaxies! I enjoy seeing a Romulan perspective and look forward to seeing what comes after this! There is so much potential and I can't wait to see which you go with it!

I enjoyed this especially as my first read in the new campaign. I loved seeing the different perspectives and the different emotions and feelings as well as some of the same ones. I think you've done a great job setting this story up and I'm excited to see what comes next!

As a fellow Reacher fan, I appreciate seeing that name here. This is a great intro to the overall mission for the fleet action. As Brennan stated, you quickly filling is in on the necessary information and then set us up for the incoming action. Great job and I look forward to seeing what comes next!

This was a great intro! It flowed easily and is a nice set up for the next piece of the puzzle. Great job!

I love the see the individual stories starting to connect by the characters and crews reuniting. I think the upcoming battle will be one for the ages. Will they be able to rally enough ships to accomplish their goal? I'm eager to see what happens!

The moment the child was killed was ruthless but it was used well to show the sheer brutality of the Vaadwaur. I understand Gab's stance and why he made the decision he did. Great work!

I particularly liked the undercover passengers being utilized here. They snuck in right under Starfleets nose. I think you did a great job showing how the everyday mundane tasks can be demanding and help blind commanders to things around them at times. Great work!

I look forward these stories every day now. I'm glad to everyone doing well so far and their ability to cooperate with allies here. I'm looking forward to the next one!