Julius Ashworthy

A great little scene! I also built my captain and CMO to be friends - though I could not imagine my CMO taking on the executive position. I like the banter, realness, and the tension woven in - all done in such few words. Great story post!

I haven't read the other parts! But this was a fun read. I enjoy the little details like 'trying to gain a semblance of control' or hiding behind his coffee cup. And the extra details to heighten both the distrust of the intelligence officer and the tension he brings. Hope it all works out : )

A quick read that lays out a lot of facts about what's going on - which I always appreciate. I enjoy the use of British English here as they discuss The Duke. Mantart is a delightful word I need to add to my own vocabulary. But anyway, it makes the crew feel freal and fleshed out!

"Bad kitty" seems extra sharp coming from another Feline race - the ultimate playground insult. A fun shuttle scene, and overall a fast-paced read. I'm enjoying how they each move the story ahead whil still giving us insights on the crew, their behaviors, and their personalities.

A fast past post that continues the story well! Provides a good amount of detail both on the Kzinti and the multiverse that helps add a bit of needed context to the story, and also again ends with a lovely twist. These continue to be a fun, quickly paced read!

Aww, I feel bad for Zach on his big first day as Captain. And also, somehow being called "cat" seems oddly... prejudicial? In this scenario! A fast past read with little moments of humor dug in. I appreciate it and look forward to continue reading. A fun twist using what I believe is a rare species from the animated series.

This group of crew is quite adorably inept in a way that I love! The movie reference was done well, and you pivot well between the two groups that it reads quite naturally. I also thoroughly enjoyed the "did I hit it?" with the phaser!

This read very fun! From the all-caps screaming to the exaggerated accent. It was fast, amusing, and filled with little lines that helped build up character personalities. Definitely a fun opening!

This was a great read. It was very tense and also very Star Trek. "and moved like it never needed to hurry." is a great line to spook the reader! I also really appreciate the loom's appearance and charm! You actually felt as the reader that you (the author) might kill off Thawn. There were a lot of lovely one-liners.

There's a flow to the chapter, more so in the beginning of "a, then b, then c" that, the first time, I think feels a bit confusing. But as it continues repeated throughout, it makes more and more sense and feels more like an internal monologue of the character. There's a lot in this scene, and the Vulcan is written so emotionlessly well - great job!

Cloaked Jem'Hadar is indeed a terrifying string of words! I enjoyed the visual of all the telescopes and lenses turning in a specific direction - and the call out that this leaves me partially blind. Anything that shows off how awesome starships are is always a delight!

What a lovely (in a sad way??) scene between sisters. The non-answers, pauses, dialogue-corrections they make - all very real and poetic. It sets up a very nice scene all while building the stakes for what will happen next in the story. Family seems like a theme in this story!

A good bit of tension in the opening - I love the details given, including the Crazy Horse literally feeling how close the Breen ship was. There's a lot in here that helps move the story forward and sets up some interesting conflict! Also some very nice character personality drops that helps flesh them out and make them feel real!

You do a great job of exploring the alien-ness of the Xindi crew and their personalities. The clicking and frustration (almost inpatience) comes across very nicely. The turning of the plot at the end - from the loom buoy's to a race to get within comms range - came rather smoothly too and will no doubt transition well into the next post!

What a lovely opening. I specifically enjoyed the description of 80 and the general chaos of the station - as well as the question: is it from lack of care, or are they just too busy with the current chaos? A Cardassian officer who notices her homeworld is no longer even on the map is also a haunting preface to the reality they're facing. I look forward to reading more!

What a fascinating piece. First - I just want to say I really enjoy the name "Citra Bukhard". It has a lovely ring to it. There's a tension on display that almost feels like panic in this chapter, and the 'doubt' dropping fits really nicely as a landing. This feels like a transition chapter that helps build up plot and character. It reads well and leaves me with many questions!

“In theory,” Atil’ika murmured quietly. -- Such a dangerous line in a Trek Story. I like how positive and forward this is - def. not in anyway foreshadowing a bad time for anyone! I enjoyed seeing bits of personality, and felt the writing moved great!

The last line is great! Really sums up to the 'point' of this story. The scenes move really fast, but the action is still easily traceable and understandable. I'm also a sucker for any story that cements the 'ship' as 'home'!

This is a fun, tense scene that really helps set up the profile of the enemy! The just sudden collapse of the first Romulan, followed by the three huddled together in defensive fear, really does a great job in just a few lines to instill how scary - and dangerous - the enemy is. You start with 'the bridge was tense' - but really, it was the entire scene!

This is a thick read - a lot to digest and follow, but it rather smoothly flows from one scene to the next. A particularly liked the line: "Airex grimaced. ‘Are we to assume the Klingons stupid?’ -- ‘Yes,’ scoffed Kharth"" though I almost missed it! We've both reached 21 chapters in our respective stories, but yours are much longer than mine, I believe, so I can only imagine how tough it is to keep this all organized and streamlined. The commentary between the various characters is fast and very 'treky'. The only thing that throws me off is the ' instead of " for dialogue - I'm not naturally expecting it, so a few times I read dialogue and exposition and had to go back.